It’s All in the Clicks – Flash Fiction
“I know how to do this, just be quiet”, Mary said to Pete as she listened intently with her stethoscope up against the safe’s dial.
Stopping briefly, Mary said to Pete, “It should only take a few more tries to break this baby.
Frightened as a rabbit Pete replied, “I sure hope so, we’ve been here almost an hour. I need to see my fathers will”.
Hearing the clicks, carefully turning the dial clockwise and counterclockwise, then back again, she knew she had it.
“Voila, Pete. I’ve never met a safe that I couldn’t crack. Dad would be proud”.
This was written for a flash fiction challenge over at Carrot Ranch.
99 Words.
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This story really clicks!
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🙂
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wow..the confidence… It looks like the dad was an expert in cracking safe boxes too..nice story.
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Thanks!
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I love this one!
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Thanks!
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You’ve created the suspense, now i wouldn’t mind knowing if they are in the will, too!
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I’ll see what I can do:)
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Great title, Susan! I love the nervous tension of Pete set against the confidence of Mary. Both are hoping to be in their Dads’ good graces it seems.
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Thanks, Charli!
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